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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: fourmoons
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
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    Newly Discovered Shades
    When I was young,
    I was hurt
    Beaten, abandoned, and abused.
    So I would fly away
    In hopes that I could find someone to take care of me.
    I would find a decent first impression
    And land in their direction
    Only to be locked in a cage and have my feathers plucked,
    and plucked,
    and plucked.
    On account of my pain, I flew away once again.
    I sat alone in my own world,
    I did not seek an other soul.
    I sang to the wind,
    Listened to the voices of a world unheard,
    Saw the moments occurring in a world unseen,
    And was very much content.
    With every thing forgotten,
    &#8203;I left no memory of emotion,
    Leaving nothing for me but simple apathy.
    Once upon a time, I was sitting in the trees
    Calmly holding flowers as they bloomed.
    Then you sneaked into my world
    And I could not comprehend what I had seen.
    A brand new feeling
    A brand new memory
    A first impression of which I could not resist.
    I showed you all of my world,
    You led me into yours
    And ruffled my feathers, but allowed them to grow
    Into a color I had never seen before.
    Then you became my world
    In which I have become most content.

    By Christine Jewel Burkhart
    March 3, 2013

    Submitted on 2013-04-18 22:48:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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