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    dots Submission Name: Lost in need of Spacedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLost in need of Spacedots
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    Lost in the land of I died while dreaming
    I am no longer a man, I exist only
    as a wounded heart whose streaming
    blood will not congeal.

    This night like every night can only end
    with the sun rays peaking above
    my mountain redoubt.


    Yes
    But first the sun's hope must traverse
    the emptiness of all times beyond time
    without you.
    (some night I may fail this test)
    Some morning the sun is sure to
    annihilate me body and soul.
    Worse my heart might be cauterized
    and no longer bleed for you.

    I feel the sentience of the wind
    as our tale is told by brushing gust
    and eddied whirl.
    and just like your last kiss upon my cheek.
    I am left compelled to repeat and reapeat...

    I fling out promises into an awe filled
    sky where the moon is no more than a
    phantom
    (maybe it's not madness)
    but truly a case of
    you
    are the one.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Time, space and just being lost around it. This was a really ineteresting read. There is doubt, hope, desperation, longing...all mixed up in one. I like the vulnerability that comes with it.
    | Posted on 2013-04-26 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely. It can be madness too;). Good luck with that.
    | Posted on 2013-04-19 00:00:00 | by voiceless | [ Reply to This ]


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