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    dots Submission Name: Artistic Realitydots

    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsArtistic Realitydots

    Artistic Reality

    Trees in the distance
    Hazes of blue
    Scenes of an aritist's dream
    What to feel? What to do?

    Canvas lay empty
    Until he awakes
    His dream can not be captured
    Too many mistakes

    Frustration and anger
    Leads to his demise
    The canvas is still empty
    A tear from his eyes

    Droplets of salt
    Roll down his aged face
    His art is quite hopless
    Feels nothing but disgrace

    No more he can take
    Throwing down his wet brush
    To the window he runs
    In a terrible rush

    Through an old window pane
    Into the day
    He sees his artwork
    And tis there it will stay

    For to capture it wrong
    Is of definate ill fate
    To destroy such beauty
    He would certainly hate

    Submitted on 2004-08-03 20:50:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      creative. what i got from it was that some things in life are great as they are, and dont need to be changed to be right. what is always the same, isnt always right. good job.
    | Posted on 2004-08-03 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol, oh yeah that sucks. for some thing to come out so perfect by mistake then to know that if you try to capture it in another form you would mess up the whole idea. well i think of it as painful irony. but thats me. i liked how you showed this. good write.
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by wretched_muse | [ Reply to This ]

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