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    dots Submission Name: i was whole.dots
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    Author: love_confusion
    ASL Info:    20/f/ct
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 10/53/57
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    dotsi was whole.dots
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    I was whole.

    I was happy,
    I felt alive, I felt the joy, I felt the sun.
    I felt love for everyone and everything
    But I was not in love with anyone.
    I was young.

    Then you walked into my life.
    And still I remained whole.
    For the first time I was in love.
    I felt the butterflies
    As you sang me a song
    I fell for your words
    Then for your voice
    I feel for the passion
    Diplayed in each verse.
    And each time I heard it I fell even more


    But then you left.
    You took part of me with you.
    I was incomplete.
    A frame without a picture.
    But still I managed with what I had
    I still smiled, I still laughed
    And I still tried to find joy in the simplest things..

    And since you other have come into my life.
    Always parting with a piece of me.
    Because in the end, they all just leave.
    Until one day there was no more.

    I have nothing left to give.
    I have nothing left to feel.
    I am empty.
    An empty shell filled with memories.
    I can no longer love, for I have no love to give.




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