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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    in every essence that turns to vapor
    melting with the mellow wind
    to kiss

    and every lingering woe
    that scurries the heart

    run-through's of forever
    began --- not today
    with every weeping wait
    ingress racemes of fate

    hoisting monochrome colors
    to an erratic sky
    an idyllic melody
    a goddesses’ cry

    Submitted on 2013-04-21 01:56:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your description, and use of words is indeed very impressive. I did enjoy reading this piece.

    | Posted on 2013-04-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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