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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.12 - 366/360/153
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsYesterdaydots
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    Perhaps it wasn’t meant to be this way-
    The dragonfly adrift
    The face of the pond

    Its wings no longer thrashing
    Incandescent-

    The captured sun-
    Set
    In each chamber




    Submitted on 2013-04-21 20:27:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      and isn't it odd
    our meditations on death
    are like clipped wings
    and the perfect corpses
    of fallen birds or insects
    as dead poets sing...
    | Posted on 2013-04-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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