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    dots Submission Name: …Mockingbird lies...dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.09 - 366/363/154
    Words: 19
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots…Mockingbird lies...dots
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    There- the mockingbird lies
    Tearing its gossamer garments
    Amid the scorched soil

    Like Job beneath the heavens




    Submitted on 2013-04-21 20:48:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have always admired Job, and thought I could not be so staunch in the face of such obliteration. I like the comparison of the bird to the story of Job because the story has such presence and the man has such a character, history that I feel like my mind does a run through a thousand years when processing that image. It has the power of history backing it, history of great suffering but also faith, a faith unlike any I've known, so I think that was a great choice.

    I think another line or two before the final line might solidify or fortify the poem as a whole, but I do like the simplicity of it. I enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2013-04-23 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]


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