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    dots Submission Name: Orange Moons + Machines dots
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    Author: raspberry89
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 5/18/22
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dots Orange Moons + Machines dots
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    I think that Iíve gone crazy, mindless.
    Iíve lost sight of myself, i am spineless.
    I know no controls, I cannot empathize.
    A soul that's long been sold and a heart desensitized.
    Blood flows through me cold, my pulse mechanized.
    Anger's a thousandfold and every second emphasized.




    Submitted on 2013-04-23 12:13:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Heh that was very entertaining, I loved it ! I loved the playfullness, it was like a kid running arround the playground with a bloody knife laughing laughing singing round-round the merry-go-round . Ah maybe that image is a bit much, but it was the feeling I got from you continues rhyme. Truly good flow of feelings, a deconstruction. Thank you
    | Posted on 2013-05-01 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]


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