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    dots Submission Name: Intangibledots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIntangibledots
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    bundle up every waking vividness
    soft as a lingering dream
    gripping dissolution

    becoming

    embodiments of the night
    mantled by stars in blue light
    anticipating the coming of morn
    only to die at dawn ...




    Submitted on 2013-04-24 08:38:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      No one can define another. The moment one comes to this realization is the moment one is truly free. God, the designer of all, is the one being that can define us.

    This piece almost seems angst. The fury of the lines beat one after the other. It's very articulate in its accretions. In its cry for freedom.

    There are some very nice imagery as well. Imagery is what I usually find most interesting in a piece. I like how it begins as almost a dream, then traverses the night and is embraced by the stars.

    well done!
    -JP
    | Posted on 2013-04-24 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      No one can define another. The moment one comes to this realization is the moment one is truly free. God, the designer of all, is the one being that can define us.

    This piece almost seems angst. The fury of the lines beat one after the other. It's very articulate in its accretions. In its cry for freedom.

    There are some very nice imagery as well. Imagery is what I usually find most interesting in a piece. I like how it begins as almost a dream, then traverses the night and is embraced by the stars.

    well done!
    -JP
    | Posted on 2013-04-24 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      No one can define another. The moment one comes to this realization is the moment one is truly free. God, the designer of all, is the one being that can define us.

    This piece almost seems angst. The fury of the lines beat one after the other. It's very articulate in its accretions. In its cry for freedom.

    There are some very nice imagery as well. Imagery is what I usually find most interesting in a piece. I like how it begins as almost a dream, then traverses the night and is embraced by the stars.

    well done!
    -JP
    | Posted on 2013-04-24 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]


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