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    dots Submission Name: I am to youdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI am to youdots
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    Soon your own white shirt
    like the dark bedroom wall
    will be the last you put on
    The last bottle of wine that held the savored drop
    will be emptied in the trash

    Soon the wind will chill the summer warmth we know
    and blow our silent promises like crumbling leaves
    around trees
    Perhaps, you will look for similarities between me
    and the intricate folds of your skin(there is none)
    wonder where the years go and my
    touch

    Soon our eyes will be sadder and wiser
    when everything should have been
    what we try to forget (remember)




    Submitted on 2013-04-26 21:35:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      While I understqand this and know where it's coming from, I emotionally have a hard time relating because I'm not one that can give up or give in. "But for the grace of God..." I've been close a couple of times, but always battered out the kinks and faded out the scars.
    Hope this is not autobiographical, because there is such a tone of melancholy and sadness.
    ~Jan
    | Posted on 2013-05-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds about giving up or perhaps knowing it will come and being ready. This is sad but we've been through this so I can relate. Sometimes we see things coming, we choose to ignore, conceal and forget about it. I respect where this is coming from and I think this is an amazing piece.
    | Posted on 2013-04-29 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. reminds me of inevitability, It was touching, and a bit sad, I really enjoyed
    | Posted on 2013-04-27 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]


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