Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: I am to youdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 939
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 896



    Description:
       edited..


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI am to youdots
    -------------------------------------------





    Soon your own white shirt
    like the dark bedroom wall
    will be the last you put on
    The last bottle of wine that held the savored drop
    will be emptied in the trash

    Soon the wind will chill the summer warmth we know
    and blow our silent promises like crumbling leaves
    around trees
    Perhaps, you will look for similarities between me
    and the intricate folds of your skin(there is none)
    wonder where the years go and my
    touch

    Soon our eyes will be sadder and wiser
    when everything should have been
    what we try to forget (remember)




    Submitted on 2013-04-26 21:35:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      While I understqand this and know where it's coming from, I emotionally have a hard time relating because I'm not one that can give up or give in. "But for the grace of God..." I've been close a couple of times, but always battered out the kinks and faded out the scars.
    Hope this is not autobiographical, because there is such a tone of melancholy and sadness.
    ~Jan
    | Posted on 2013-05-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds about giving up or perhaps knowing it will come and being ready. This is sad but we've been through this so I can relate. Sometimes we see things coming, we choose to ignore, conceal and forget about it. I respect where this is coming from and I think this is an amazing piece.
    | Posted on 2013-04-29 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. reminds me of inevitability, It was touching, and a bit sad, I really enjoyed
    | Posted on 2013-04-27 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    197283

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Carry written by saartha
    prison written by ShyOne
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Love written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Cover written by saartha
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry