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    dots Submission Name: These Wordsdots

    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThese Wordsdots

    These words
    Building behind my eyelids
    Screaming to be free.
    My mind is a prison.

    Good ideas
    Relative to the quality of the idea, not the subject of good
    Great ideas, terrible execution.
    I have all the wrong words.

    Should a man have no love for his work
    How can he possibly expect it to please others?
    I hide what I do
    I have no love for these words.

    Can I withstand the tide,
    A stonefaced cliff holding firm, stoic against the raging winds?
    Even the cliff’s stone face is worn, in time.
    What hope have I, flesh and so much less?

    These words are my wind.
    I am not a cliff. To face the storm unmoving is to be swept away.
    But to embrace that whirlwind is dangerous.
    There is no gain without risk.

    All I have to lose are these words.
    And I can always get new ones.

    Submitted on 2013-04-27 00:34:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Writing is not a science. The things I actually craft sometimes get much harsher reviews than those that seem to spill out on their own free will. Writing is a compulsion that takes courage, and time to perfect. Chin Up.
    You seem to already understand that...I liked the way you closed...and yes, there will always be new words waiting for you, even in blankness.
    | Posted on 2013-05-03 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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