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A Healthy Dose of Self-Loathing


Author: TheSnoitart
ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53 /64 /52
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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A Healthy Dose of Self-Loathing



I walk these streets
Forgetting
or maybe just not caring
that the blood on these hands
is my own.
I inflict the wounds
I find upon myself
then question why the world
hates me.
How can it not?
I can't even stop hating myself.




Submitted on 2013-04-27 00:46:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is really good. Its simplistic and clear, yet it open the reader to such a bigger realm of personally relevant thoughts. thank you. but, though the title is great on its own, the poem lacks the confidence in perseverance that the title holds at first glance. maybe you could work either's meaning into one or the other to give the whole read a better general meaning... just an idea. still liked the poem!
| Posted on 2013-04-30 00:00:00 | by Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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