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    dots Submission Name: Lust Part II - His and Hersdots
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    Author: Akiko Hime
    ASL Info:    23/F/Romania
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 25/7/11
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 401
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    Description:
       Basicly : His thoughts and Her reactions. To be continued with Part III : "But a Sin"


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    dotsLust Part II - His and Hersdots
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    I look upon you with a lust
    You gaze back at me reasured with trust;
    I'll hold you tight, as you're loosing life,
    So cold in my arms, oblivious to my thoughts .

    I feel your heart beat weaker
    As I lead your soul to the reaper;
    Your warmth is fading, and my desire is raging,
    I'll kiss your tears and feed on your fears.

    Your eyes are lost in passion - as you seek redemption,
    Your body frozen by lust - is turning to dust,
    Your frail soul has lost its glow - as your path is shown,
    Yet your kind heart remains close - still blooming beautifuly as a rose.

    I look down on your memories,
    Pearls of lushes dreams, simple awakenings...
    I glare upon your wishes,
    Shards of reality, broken images of insanity ...

    I watch over your thoughts,
    Careless fantasies of lands beyond...
    And then I hit a glitch, and my heart won't move and inch,
    I gasp at the sight of your darkest Wish ...




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