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    dots Submission Name: Lust Part III - But a Sindots

    Author: Akiko Hime
    ASL Info:    23/F/Romania
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 25/7/11
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       The last part of the poem Lust. It was originally one poem, but I decided to brake it in 3 stages to make it easyer to read. It is basicly the demon of lust taking another victim....and somehow being moved, even if just for a second.

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    dotsLust Part III - But a Sindots

    "My soul by you has been tainted -
    And now my feelings are draining,
    My heart for your is craving -
    As life from my veins is fading,
    The tears I cry are shards of the desires that lie inside -
    Hold me tight and kiss me one last time.

    To you my sweet I give my life,
    For you my darling I die...
    Just kiss my eyes and lay me aside,
    Whisper me of your hate and take my breath so I may never awake."

    And so with my last glare you lose your flare...
    Nothing remains to withness her decay,
    Only the wind whispers of this loss,
    Carrying her last words and taunts from within my arms.

    "Another soul I've taken, another heart awaken,
    Another body turned to dust, another craving turned to lust,
    Another mind clouded by thoughts, another feeling lost,
    Another tear shed for a cause, another yet so different from them all...

    I shall ponder nonetheless, because of this feeling in my chest
    I am but a sin, I am but a wandering dream, I am everything but what you need me to be ...

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