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    dots Submission Name: Kiss in the darkdots
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    Author: Akiko Hime
    ASL Info:    23/F/Romania
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 25/7/11
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsKiss in the darkdots
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    No trace of light,
    Just the crimson taunt of lies,
    No flicker of life,
    Just the silent whisper of the night.

    In this sharp edged void
    Shadows are an entity of noise,
    Here where one has no fears
    Memories are broken down to tears.

    Suspended in a motionless tension
    The sweet scent of poisen confies protection,
    Inhaling the aroma of decay
    The skin withers away.

    Ah an amnesiac to claugh the veins,
    To numb those thoughts ressurected by pain,
    So may one sink deeper in a dream,
    So may one yield to the desires within.

    In a moments colision
    The body reacts to death's incesion,
    Beyond the veils of this halucinogenic vision
    Ones lips turn crimson.

    Your touch - smooth as the flutter of moths
    Trace along the surface of my thoughts ...
    Elegant is this symbol of passion -
    A cruel cold desire of redemption.

    I'll carve the mark of sin on one's gracefull chest,
    And with this first kiss I take one's last, most precious, breath.




    Submitted on 2013-04-28 12:24:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I had shivers multiple times reading this. There's a dark beauty in these words, perhaps darker than most would care to think about. But I'm glad you delved that deep. Thank you. Not only was it thought-provoking and emotional, but rhythmic and very strong, imagery-wise.
    | Posted on 2013-04-29 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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