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    dots Submission Name: the good in youdots
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    Author: love_confusion
    ASL Info:    20/f/ct
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 10/53/57
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    dotsthe good in youdots
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    I guess it was my fault for getting attached.
    I should have known better that happiness does not last.
    You were the one person I've always wanted.
    To hold
    To kiss
    I wanted my future with you.
    And I watched you slip out of my hands like water.
    I guess thatís the hardest part of it all.
    Knowing I once had you.

    You had me wrapped around your little finger.
    And you knew this.
    You would give me that smirk.
    And with it, I knew you were aware that there
    wasn't a damn thing I wouldn't do for you.

    Iím not going to write about all the times you screwed me over.
    Iím not going to make you out to be this bad person.
    Because at some point you were what was right for me.
    You rescued me when I was lost.
    You helped me win the battles with my demons
    You made me feel beautiful
    And when you looked at me, I knew I mattered.
    Those are the memories I will remember you by
    Those where, at that point in time I knew,
    you loved me.

    So no, I wonít hate you
    For outgrowing me
    For lying
    For leaving
    But Iím not going to pretend Iím ok with it either




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      I feel like this sometime. It almost feels like being used And a great piece I enjoyed it. It was easy to read keep up the good head work.
    | Posted on 2013-05-02 00:00:00 | by angelagresham19 | [ Reply to This ]
      A powerful, mature piece that shows significant personal growth concerning you as a person. The feelings behind it are clear-cut and relatable, the poem itself engaging and easy to read and understand; I enjoyed it. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2013-04-29 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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