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    dots Submission Name: *dots

    Author: Snow9
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 38/21/17
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    If tears could drown my senses...
    still the non-being tugs at flesh.
    No hand to spurn them out,
    for they've accumulated to the hollow.
    Be careful where I tread.

    My mornings will be empty,
    I'll have no breakfast,
    I'll click my tongue to see window intrusions of death.

    Submitted on 2013-04-29 11:06:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the first stanza especially this "non-being tugs at flesh". I wish there was more to this, a strong ending perhaps. Anyway, I really enjoyed this and thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-05-06 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      It was very thought provoking and deeper than I was expecting at first. A nice use of imagery, although it's a little unclear as to whether this is actually two poems or not. Other than that, good job :)
    | Posted on 2013-04-29 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]

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