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    dots Submission Name: Hushed Momentsdots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       true story from a friend of mine . . .


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    dotsHushed Momentsdots
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    The evening swayed in moonlight
    set by the rhythm of lovers hearts;
    Each fragment captured by candlelight
    on this hour two souls will mark


    Savoring moments bathed in the black of night
    a wafting ether ecstasy;
    Deepening in silent blight
    of hearts protesting destiny


    Now fades their precious night,
    the sweet ache of departing;
    He remains on the afterthought,
    She to her vows: committing


    Forbidden escapes from reality
    to loves mischievous device;
    a cycle of languid insanity
    of lovers living compromise





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