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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1083/406/116
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Passion
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    The volcano blurted out its existence,
    as if in defiance of the air's superior mobility,
    while the waters boiled in recognition.




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      I can just clearly see volcano talking to air and be like, "That's it...I was sleeping for the last 80 years, it's time you heard me roar." It's a bit of a funny imagery, but how cruel volcanoes can be when awakened. We haven't paid them much tribute lately and yet they can devastate.
    | Posted on 2015-01-20 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Classical_element
    | Posted on 2013-05-15 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Such compose the philosophical world's early basics, earth, fire, air and water... we seem to have the "four elements" pretty well represented with some personalities thrown in for good measure. A lively composure. See
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Classical_element for a good read.
    | Posted on 2013-05-14 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Also,
    I didnt miss the sexual metaphors here....
    Im just puzzled as to where the not liking to talk while having sex comes into play.
    I still stand with my assertion that these words speak of expression. After all, isnt sex the ultimate expression of attraction?
    | Posted on 2013-05-04 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      You really didnt know what you were trying to say? You said it so well it seems magically mystical that the words lined out as they did.
    These words express expression...the volcano may be inactive for a time, but eventually it must blurt out
    Hey! Im here! Thought i was a dead rock, eh? Guess again...
    Or something like that.
    I think you were trying to say that things are expressed eventually, even if theyre unseen or forgotten...boiling to the surface in their own time.
    Well, thats what i think you were trying to say when i read the words you wrote.
    | Posted on 2013-05-03 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot!
    Im not sure I can put a finger on exactly why its appealing,
    but maybe its the haiku-ish way it moves from line to line and idea to idea in sync.
    in fact, aside from syllable count, this little ditty meets the "traditional" haiku....it uses nature to describe the human experience; it says a lot with few words, and each line can stand on its own.
    Definately a zen/haiku vibe.
    Or is it a martial arts vibe?
    I also like your choice of 'blurt' as the volcano's action...its a wholly hasty human verb, but I think its perfect for your volcano.

    Thanks for posting, Bruce.
    I enjoyed the read. :)
    | Posted on 2013-05-02 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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