Non-existence by CynicalxDreamer

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Submission Name: Non-existence dots

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Author:	CynicalxDreamer
ASL Info:	31/m/7th Level of Hell
Elite Ratio:	2.46 - 40/100/64
Words:	168

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	920
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	980

Description:

I have never been suicidal. Depressed, melancholic, and prone to inner reflection but never suicidal. However, I have had suicidal thoughts before and lately. This poem touches on this subject. I blame it on having an active imagination that tries to analyze and picture every thing that tumbles through it.

Non-existence dots

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I cry over the songs and stories of others
Yet I do not know why I cannot
Shed a tear for my own life
And perhaps that's the saddest thing I know

The day I finally cut my wrists
Will not be a cry for help
But a test to the universe
Of whether I mattered at all

Whether I was needed or wanted
Whether I was a friend to be missed
Or a lover to sorrowfully long for
Or simply a name worn off the stone by time

I continuously feel my existence
Is peripheral to the lives around me
An accessory to the tales told
Only to be lost in the bylines

That emptiness of subsistence
Echoes in the dark of the night
Troubles my mind when I try to sleep
Fearing that dreams are all I am

The day I test the world
I will bleed out this emptiness
I will take my first breath
And see if I lived

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Unfortunately I relate quite well to this piece. It is a dark insight into your mind, very personal and painful from what I can see- and for that I'm sorry you're going through this, I know all too well what emptiness is.
| Posted on 2013-05-04 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
This was a delight to read. Although I think it would read easier with some punctuation, this poem was a slam dunk. I especially liked the line: "or simply a name worn off the stone by time". Keep up the good work, and spread the word about eliteskills! This site is nothing like what it once was. But hopefully it will pick up again.
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| Posted on 2013-05-01 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

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