Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Non-existencedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: CynicalxDreamer
    ASL Info:    31/m/7th Level of Hell
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 40/100/64
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 920
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 980



    Description:
       
    I have never been suicidal. Depressed, melancholic, and prone to inner reflection but never suicidal. However, I have had suicidal thoughts before and lately. This poem touches on this subject. I blame it on having an active imagination that tries to analyze and picture every thing that tumbles through it.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsNon-existencedots
    -------------------------------------------


    I cry over the songs and stories of others
    Yet I do not know why I cannot
    Shed a tear for my own life
    And perhaps that's the saddest thing I know

    The day I finally cut my wrists
    Will not be a cry for help
    But a test to the universe
    Of whether I mattered at all

    Whether I was needed or wanted
    Whether I was a friend to be missed
    Or a lover to sorrowfully long for
    Or simply a name worn off the stone by time

    I continuously feel my existence
    Is peripheral to the lives around me
    An accessory to the tales told
    Only to be lost in the bylines

    That emptiness of subsistence
    Echoes in the dark of the night
    Troubles my mind when I try to sleep
    Fearing that dreams are all I am

    The day I test the world
    I will bleed out this emptiness
    I will take my first breath
    And see if I lived




    Submitted on 2013-04-30 10:46:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Unfortunately I relate quite well to this piece. It is a dark insight into your mind, very personal and painful from what I can see- and for that I'm sorry you're going through this, I know all too well what emptiness is.
    | Posted on 2013-05-04 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a delight to read. Although I think it would read easier with some punctuation, this poem was a slam dunk. I especially liked the line: "or simply a name worn off the stone by time". Keep up the good work, and spread the word about eliteskills! This site is nothing like what it once was. But hopefully it will pick up again.
    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2013-05-01 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    197315

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry