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    dots Submission Name: My Ointment's Flydots
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    Author: raspberry89
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 5/18/22
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       My hopes are to never see him again but dying sounded much more poetic :)


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    dots My Ointment's Flydots
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    It's always been a lie.
    I was naive to even try,
    to all along comply,
    when I heard the hue and cry.
    I continued to deny,
    he had a finger in each pie.
    So eat up while you lie,
    in the bed you made, where I hope you die.




    Submitted on 2013-05-01 09:46:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed this quite a bit. I liked the rhyming throughout, and it almost felt sort of playful even behind the bitterness. A good write! Thanks for sharing :)
    | Posted on 2013-05-05 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahaha pretty neat, its rhytmical and entertaining. Its got a bit of comical darkness. Amusing I enjoyed it
    | Posted on 2013-05-01 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]


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