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    dots Submission Name: Red Rain: Deliriumdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/806/391
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       Red Rain: Delirium (Red Rain: Anthology Part II)


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    dotsRed Rain: Deliriumdots
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    High as I could raise them I drop to my knee. "Get up!" A deep angered voice yelled, and one of them picked me up and rushed me out of the house. I almost fall down the stairs. Outside I can hear the gunshots... pop... pop. An officer comes out my house, and utters the words out of his mouth "Clear!" I felt exactly what he said, I knew that the only other person in my house was my wife. She had just lost her life...

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