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    dots Submission Name: Midnight Lovedots
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    Author: MmR
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 468/442/138
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Misc/Romance
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    dotsMidnight Lovedots
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    You weren't as illuminating 
    As I remembered you to be
    Though you were still quite beautiful.
    As I reached my hand out for you
    You just didn't feel the same..



    Funny, I thought you'd always be
    My midnight love..




    Submitted on 2013-05-03 15:29:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      revisiting love is never the same the second time around. something to do with time warping things and making them into a lot more than they were perhaps?

    the minimalism of this piece is perfect.
    the ultimate punch to the windpipe.

    though you were still quite beautiful reminds me of when i was younger and i used to be able to get away with pulling the most insulting thing by following up with "in the nicest possible way"

    though you were still quite beautiful. just not what i wanted.

    ouch. perfect.
    | Posted on 2013-05-08 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      This is well crafted and the minimalist style seems to be a good choice. These seven lines say just enough that it allows the reader to recall and relate without getting lost in your descriptions.
    The topic facinates me because I always wonder if time has just changed my perspective, or if the other has changed that much. Perhaps its a combination of both, but you express it well.
    ~Jan
    | Posted on 2013-05-03 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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