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    dots Submission Name: Forgotten Slayingsdots
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    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsForgotten Slayingsdots
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    Slit my throat with your divine dagger
    Justification of one more crime
    One hand that eliminates all possiblities
    Paint your walls red with my fear

    My defiance is now noted as my death
    Escapades and trivial mind games
    Plunge deep into my chest with your talons
    Tear at my weakend heart

    Ravaged
    Stolen
    Forgotten

    Tonight we forget those who trusted

    Help me

    HELP ME!

    I tried...




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      I took from this poem, as a person dying, going to hell, and being torn apart by the devil. If this was how it was supposed to be portrayed, I thought the lines at the end were fittingly melodramatic. Its like, old fashioned, in a newly thought of sort of way. Like the first lines tell a lot of the psychology of a suicide victim, but the rest displays the sinning soul thrown into hell. Is that what you were getting at? Dunno, just a thought, nicely written, I see the other side everyone else is speaking of as well. Very intense.
    | Posted on 2004-08-03 00:00:00 | by Dalelord | [ Reply to This ]
      "Tonight we forgot those who trusted"--thats a really meaningful line and i relate to that alot. many times, who i trust are forgotten for a good period of time in misery. good job.
    | Posted on 2004-08-03 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]


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