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I took from this poem, as a person dying, going to hell, and being torn apart by the devil. If this was how it was supposed to be portrayed, I thought the lines at the end were fittingly melodramatic. Its like, old fashioned, in a newly thought of sort of way. Like the first lines tell a lot of the psychology of a suicide victim, but the rest displays the sinning soul thrown into hell. Is that what you were getting at? Dunno, just a thought, nicely written, I see the other side everyone else is speaking of as well. Very intense.
"Tonight we forgot those who trusted"--thats a really meaningful line and i relate to that alot. many times, who i trust are forgotten for a good period of time in misery. good job.
Submission Name: Forgotten Slayings
