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let go


Author: CNPerry
Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 20 /27 /21
Words: 41
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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let go



let go this disease
let go this trembling fire
let go this house that burns
let go this bastard liar
let go the cynic
let go chains forged by both
let go this requiem
that long ago we wrote
let go




Submitted on 2013-05-04 07:49:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I don't know about let go in the very last line, if there is thought behind that I stand corrected, as is, this is already redundant by the repitition throughout the piece. I dont have a problem with that, I think pieces like this need to be read by the person writing it or someone who can express the word. I can easily see this being spoken aloud in a dark room. I definately agree with the message, honestly hoping it sinks in to those who take a gander.

Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2013-05-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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