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    dots Submission Name: let godots
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    Author: CNPerry
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 20/27/21
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotslet godots
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    let go this disease
    let go this trembling fire
    let go this house that burns
    let go this bastard liar
    let go the cynic
    let go chains forged by both
    let go this requiem
    that long ago we wrote
    let go




    Submitted on 2013-05-04 07:49:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know about let go in the very last line, if there is thought behind that I stand corrected, as is, this is already redundant by the repitition throughout the piece. I dont have a problem with that, I think pieces like this need to be read by the person writing it or someone who can express the word. I can easily see this being spoken aloud in a dark room. I definately agree with the message, honestly hoping it sinks in to those who take a gander.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-05-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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