let go

Author: CNPerry Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 20 /27 /21 Words: 41

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let go

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let go this disease let go this trembling fire let go this house that burns let go this bastard liar let go the cynic let go chains forged by both let go this requiem that long ago we wrote let go

Submitted on 2013-05-04 07:49:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I don't know about let go in the very last line, if there is thought behind that I stand corrected, as is, this is already redundant by the repitition throughout the piece. I dont have a problem with that, I think pieces like this need to be read by the person writing it or someone who can express the word. I can easily see this being spoken aloud in a dark room. I definately agree with the message, honestly hoping it sinks in to those who take a gander. Thanks for sharing.

| Posted on 2013-05-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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