Description: I wrote something today, but this isn't it. I'm trying to get back into writing. I know this isn't my best work, but I hope it doesn't whomp.
Two Negatives Make a Positive -------------------------------------------
We were saved by the plague
of all of this sadness and self-loathing.
I looked for the boy with the most impressive frown,
and yours is a work of art.
Who would have thought
that two sad people could find happiness?
We fell in love over bitching about the weather
and choking down a meal to swallow our antidepressants.
Sometimes as in maths, two negatives make a positive.
Nah,--it doesn't "whomp". It is an original thought that you turned into a refreshing bit of poetry. I have known people who seem to enjoy a good relationship, even though they are both chronically negative,--cranky--depressed--whatever.---but I am thinking of older married folk who met when they were in side-by-each bassinets --and probably just weathered into similar splintery characters.
The idea of seeking out "the boy with the most impressive frown" is unique, almost comic--and yet it's sad too,--as if the girl feels she doesn't deserve some light-hearted happiness. As usual, you leave all these sticky little bits of thought on my already addled lobes. Silver
I enjoyed that. You shouldn't have prefaced it by saying it isn't your best because I was expecting something shoddy and this is not shoddy at all. Choking down a meal to swallow our antidepressants. What a curious and fascinating image of love.
Welcome home - or welcome back... And yes this is just the ticket for those of us topped on sweetness and light. I really do like the idea of two miserable feckers getting it on. I wonder if those two guys in the Muppet Show were giving each other the good news... Nice one, K
well, sometimes we find love and happiness in places we've never expected. and b!tching about something together is so much fun. this poem has a very sad tone but still it's a bit hopeful cause you said that you've found happiness. really good poem.
"I looked for the boy with the most impressive frown / And yours is a work of art"... i love those lines. i dont think you give yourself enough credit with this poem. i love the idea behind it.. the things that bring people together.. this is the ideal alternative to all those soppy love songs out there. this is real.
I think this must be the most upbeat thing you wrote in a long time?? It's weird, because the depression is nicely wrapped in this knee blanket, and I'm sure you'll read it with fondness while rocking on the porch one day.
This is good, and I know two negatives that made it work for a while. But then one negative got positive and broke it off with the negative! LoL Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. Matter of opinion really. I enjoyed this poem. Great job! --blt