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    dots Submission Name: Two Negatives Make a Positivedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote something today, but this isn't it. I'm trying to get back into writing. I know this isn't my best work, but I hope it doesn't whomp.


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    dotsTwo Negatives Make a Positivedots
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    We were saved by the plague
    of all of this sadness and self-loathing.
    I looked for the boy with the most impressive frown,
    and yours is a work of art.
    Who would have thought
    that two sad people could find happiness?
    We fell in love over bitching about the weather
    and choking down a meal to swallow our antidepressants.
    Sometimes as in maths, two negatives make a positive.




    Submitted on 2004-08-03 22:30:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nah,--it doesn't "whomp". It is an original thought that you turned into a refreshing bit of poetry. I have known people who seem to enjoy a good relationship, even though they are both chronically negative,--cranky--depressed--whatever.---but I am thinking of older married folk who met when they were in side-by-each bassinets --and probably just weathered into similar splintery characters.

    The idea of seeking out "the boy with the most impressive frown" is unique, almost comic--and yet it's sad too,--as if the girl feels she doesn't deserve some light-hearted happiness. As usual, you leave all these sticky little bits of thought on my already addled lobes. Silver
    | Posted on 2004-08-13 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Math of love. Great idea. This piece is very, very warm and positive - and i like it very much. You use contrast and surprise so flashily. Love Amy, your fan coming back for more.
    | Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed that. You shouldn't have prefaced it by saying it isn't your best because I was expecting something shoddy and this is not shoddy at all. Choking down a meal to swallow our antidepressants. What a curious and fascinating image of love.
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes two miserable people together can "make a positive," as you say here.

    We fell in love over [censored]ing about the weather/
    And choking down a meal to swallow our anitdepressants.

    funny, but not so funny. at least these two have found each other, and love is love,eh? i don't think it "whomps!" welcome back!
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Welcome home - or welcome back...
    And yes this is just the ticket for those of us topped on sweetness and light.
    I really do like the idea of two miserable feckers getting it on.
    I wonder if those two guys in the Muppet Show were giving each other the good news...
    Nice one,
    K
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      well, sometimes we find love and happiness in places we've never expected. and b!tching about something together is so much fun.
    this poem has a very sad tone but still it's a bit hopeful cause you said that you've found happiness. really good poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      "I looked for the boy with the most impressive frown / And yours is a work of art"... i love those lines.
    i dont think you give yourself enough credit with this poem. i love the idea behind it.. the things that bring people together.. this is the ideal alternative to all those soppy love songs out there. this is real.
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this must be the most upbeat thing you wrote in a long time?? It's weird, because the depression is nicely wrapped in this knee blanket, and I'm sure you'll read it with fondness while rocking on the porch one day.
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the message of this...the wry tongue-in-cheekiness of choking down the meal to swallow the antidepressants and the most impressive frown. cool.
    | Posted on 2004-08-03 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good, and I know two negatives that made it work for a while. But then one negative got positive and broke it off with the negative! LoL Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. Matter of opinion really. I enjoyed this poem. Great job!
    --blt
    | Posted on 2004-08-03 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really good poem. its always nice to find someone to complain with. and to find deeper meanings through eachother through complaints. good job.
    | Posted on 2004-08-03 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]


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