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    dots Submission Name: Destinydots
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    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsDestinydots
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    All the world is falling,
    and I hear the wind just calling me,
    pulling me to elsewhere,
    so
    I feel like I need to go there,
    but I don't want to,
    I just have to,
    like there's nothing else I can do.
    I don't have to make a decision,
    it's more of a mission,
    a prophetic vision,
    a destiny in remission,
    so I say to myself,
    have patience,
    this isn't a race,
    or another daydream.
    This isn't a hope or as strange
    as it may seem.
    We need to have purpose,
    if we don't then life is worthless.
    With so much beauty in nature,
    too many details to be so sure,
    that destiny's not real,
    and it's irrational to feel,
    otherwise-
    either a fool or too wise.
    no matter- it's important to disbelieve,
    that one person cannot receive,
    a duty beyond the stars
    just in case,
    the world should end
    from your lack of faith.




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      I really liked the way this ended, especially the last lines; "just in case, / the world should end / from your lack of faith." Definitely powerful, but it almost seems to get distracted about halfway through. Still really good, and thank you for sharing :D
    | Posted on 2013-05-05 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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