Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Sparkle Tearsdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Akiko Hime
    ASL Info:    23/F/Romania
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 25/7/11
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 520
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 671



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSparkle Tearsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Twinkle Twinkle faithful tears
    Shining through my dreaded fears,
    Words have scarred my fragile thoughts -
    Whispers running through my veins like clots.

    Twinkle Twinkle scattered scarres
    Marking crimson my hated dreams,
    Battles endless in my wreched past -
    All I had has turned to dust.

    Twinkle Twinkle lost wants
    Rushed within my heart's shards,
    Whishes try to reach the stars -
    Crushed under cold steel bars.

    Twinkle Twinkle beloved tears
    Shining light upon my years,
    Falling feelings make life light -
    Coloring sight with damned might.




    Submitted on 2013-05-07 15:23:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I'm so sorry you feel this way. It kind of makes me want to hug you, but that would probably be weird if it were even feasible, because we don't know each other and stuff haha.

    Anyway, I really like when people play off nursery rhymes with their poetry, particularly when writing about something that's rather sad. It seems like a good way to keep some level of light-heartedness involved in a piece that's otherwise dark and depressing. It also really helps you accomplish the feel of crushed hopes, childhood dreams, and the like, because of the reminder of childhood that songs bring.

    I hope everything gets better for you soon. Truly. I hope writing about the pain is helping too and that you're reunited with true happiness in the near future...well, unless you just happen to be fantastic about writing on subjects that have nothing to do with your current mood, in which case, my concern for your heart's well-being is for naught. peace!
    | Posted on 2013-05-11 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    197365

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    One Day written by WriteSomething
    Every..... written by jackz
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    True Death written by layDsayD
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Break Up written by WriteSomething
    Linger written by saartha
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    Song written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry