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    dots Submission Name: scratch-off-where-you've-beendots
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    Author: Solomon Disease
    ASL Info:    101, male, earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 284/292/104
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I bought one of those scratch-off-where-you've-been maps for her as a going away gift

    You know - the ones where you scratch off where you've been

    She said it was her dream to go to every single place in the world
    An impossible beautiful wonderful child-like dream
    A child-like heart - which I wish I still had

    Talking to her would make all my troubles and worries disappear
    The whole world would melt away
    It would be just us
    Warm
    Happy
    Cliche

    Very, maybe I'm just imaging how great it was
    Just thinking about her is making me feel better right now

    Had to deal with a lot of negative people recently
    And I'm tired
    Bitter aging people
    They want you to be bitter too

    At this point, I have no wish to run in some silly race to catch an imaginary prize which they think will get them . . . more . . . more of what?

    At some point, I just want to ask, what are you chasing after? What are you trying to find? There is nothing at the finish line buddy, you've been duped - and you might actually believe the lies once you cross the finish line . . . denial, the only way to prop up your empty beliefs and life

    Who am I to talk, my life is full of empty beliefs and my life is pretty empty right now

    So, I try to clean my room
    Stuff every where
    Eventually stuff starts feeling better
    Then I find the map
    . . .
    I never gave it to her
    She left before I could
    We said our goodbyes over the phone
    Now I'm sitting here with this stupid map

    Angry, lost, and alone




    Submitted on 2013-05-07 20:02:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is awesome, I miss your writing so much. From start to finish. The subject and content, your tone, after thought, all of it. Lines like,

    "Had to deal with a lot of negative people recently
    And I'm tired"

    An impossible beautiful wonderful child-like dream
    A child-like heart - which I wish I still had

    So, I try to clean my room
    Stuff every where
    Eventually stuff starts feeling better


    There is a lot of human honesty here. I love that, the only gripe I have in the whole thing is the idea that this is driven from real life, and my dear dear friend has been through this piece before hand to navigate the reader along to the conclusion...

    Angry, lost, and alone


    Sorry buddy. Chin up?
    Missed you on the site. Glad you are sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-05-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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