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    dots Submission Name: goodbyedots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsgoodbyedots
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    I wish that I could breathe the life back in to you
    help you stand and see this through
    but the door is slowly starting to close
    and the sun is fading on some distant shore
    but why should all of that matter
    when your surrounded by such love
    and the person holding your hand
    has been there for so long
    and you can't remember your own name anymore
    but you still try to and you can't fake it anymore
    your scared of what's to come
    your scared of being alone
    and you know that one day you won't be able to walk out that door
    so your cherishing memories
    and building bridges to friends and things
    but I fear that its too late
    so say goodbye old friend
    because im not allowed in this part
    and say goodbye to my heart.




    Submitted on 2013-05-09 21:18:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I absolutely love this, but you should work on the apostrophes a bit.
    I believe that in one of the last lines, you meant;

    "so your cherishing memories"
    as
    "so you're cherishing memories" instead? To say 'you are' instead of your own?

    And the same issue in

    "but I fear that its too late"
    as
    "but I fear that it's too late" to say 'it is' instead of its own?

    Otherwise, I love this. I can actually relate a lot.
    | Posted on 2013-05-13 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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