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    dots Submission Name: Hidden feelingsdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 949
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 947



    Description:
       This isn't finished at all, I'm just so angry I had to get it down and out there.....


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    dotsHidden feelingsdots
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    You know, I know
    That I'm the wrong guy for you
    You know, I know
    that my love is true
    Inside, my head
    My hopes and dreams involve you
    Inside, your mind
    I can see you running away....

    So just tell me......
    Don't let it burn inside
    Just tell me
    It's only truth don't let it hide.....


    You say, nothing
    yet your eyes tell me volumes
    I can't, take it
    Playing these guessing games
    open, wide now
    let me hear those dulcet tones girl
    Shout out, your thoughts
    Tell me that you never wanted to stay

    Just tell me.
    Don't let it burn inside
    Tell me
    It's only truth don't let it hide.
    Won't ya tell me
    This is your life don't throw it away
    You've gotta tell me
    And free us both today




    Submitted on 2013-05-09 21:53:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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