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    dots Submission Name: Sink Intodots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSink Intodots
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    We are closing in the distance
    Spaces are inside out things
    deliberately pursuing me

    I cry out when for no reason at all tears pour from me
    I sink to my knees when my feelings overwhelm

    so many days and nights I feel you strengthening me
    I can see your hand on every circumstance
    when all of the sudden there is no word
    the silence penetrates the barriers I placed to keep out the pain

    voices try to creep inside and I turn my head to keep from listening
    I look for you in the dark and foggy unknown

    I cannot let go of this romance
    I swallowed the seed and now your love is buried deep within me
    I keep trying
    to just let go
    and let myself sink into your Grace




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