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    dots Submission Name: Fun Housedots

    Author: raspberry89
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 5/18/22
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsFun Housedots

    This house doesn't need ghosts to scare anyone
    The walls here take sanity for fun
    They'll hex you with whispers in tongue
    Arrive with confidence, you'll leave with none
    The longer you stay, the further undone
    The air stifles, it thickens and numbs
    Weighing down on you like its a ton
    Constricting every cell in you, one by one
    Skeletons in these closets tote guns
    Heat coming at you like fire from dragons
    I mean heat like the fire from a thousand suns
    Your mind weakens and maddens
    This house kills souls like it's a soul assassin
    A suffering only the wicked could fathom

    Submitted on 2013-05-13 11:08:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha yer nice worl
    | Posted on 2013-06-22 00:00:00 | by dannythadog | [ Reply to This ]
      Disdain and tension drip off of the screen with your words. Flowing and streaming together in melody.
    I could see the walls and grimy windows of this Hell House behind my eyes.

    Nicely done.
    | Posted on 2013-05-13 00:00:00 | by levaprttycorpse | [ Reply to This ]

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