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    dots Submission Name: A cry for helpdots
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    Author: dewith
    ASL Info:    23, male, los angeles
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 3/1/4
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Misc/I am dead inside
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    dotsA cry for helpdots
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    Loss of words....
    No more do thoughts come as before
    So no more are words spoken...

    Do we ever realy loos in life?
    I wonder,
    Why are we given chances to fail
    And second chances to succeed
    But never knowing wich one has been given.
    So we trail life
    Blind
    Walking in darkness till we hit on something
    Or find someone who has been doing this
    For far too long
    "Don't let your luggage drag
    You may be left with nothing"
    As if it doesn't burden enough

    So you pick up
    Look at the sky
    And see
    How far heaven realy is frome you

    And you hate
    Every day, hour that passes
    And you hate
    Because that thing you want with such a passion
    Every time you reach to grab it
    Pulls itself away

    But then you realize it's not it
    But you
    Falling
    And you reach the floor
    Bouncing
    Gasping for air
    Nearly breathing
    Air filling your lungs
    Even tho I don't want to breath again

    Waking up the next morning
    To your mourning
    To knowing your still alive
    To knowing you have to live
    Alone
    Because you have to push the people away
    Desert them before they desert me

    When will my best be good enough?
    When will I be able to be alone with my own thoughts
    Without they too trying to kill me?

    So I get dressed
    Walk out
    Painted smile

    Giving you the thanks......
    For nothing face
    You give to thoes who say
    Pray and everything will be ok
    .......
    But you know it wont




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