First off fix the formatting, the increased spaces and incorrect characters were obnoxious and made me almost stop reading. The rhyme scheme is solid, nothing special. You could try to expand on each subject with in the piece a little more. Build that tension through the piece not as the piece. It isn't a horrific piece by any standards but I believe you can do a little better. This isn't a piece I'd revisit and rewrite, perhaps learn from it and develop more.