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    dots Submission Name: Sanitydots

    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 687
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    I waved goodbye to my mind today
    Must have lost it along the way
    Climbing down my family tree
    or maybe running from Destiny?

    Bowling and pool with God
    The Almighty playing games is bit odd
    A smart man says He doesn't play dice
    And yet we scamper around, lost as mice

    In the maze of our minds, so easily lost
    Cutting corners, ignoring the cost
    of taking away these barriers inside
    my mind, making me feel like I've died

    Rhyme and reason slightly misplaced
    In my mouth a leftover bad taste
    from the copper reminder that I'm alive
    aside from the buzzing in my beehive

    Some people's brains, artlessly utilitarian
    when you think about it, it's kinda scary, man
    they walk through life blinded by sanity
    I wish I could tell them they aren't free.

    Submitted on 2013-05-18 22:11:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In my mouth a leftover bad taste
    from the copper reminder that I'm alive

    Makes me think of blood but hey, that's just me.
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah i'm going to put this on my favorites list. The only thing I noticed when I read it was that the last line seemed short a syllable to keep the pattern. Perhaps that adds to the insanity effect. I love this piece though!!
    | Posted on 2013-05-25 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Anymore than you, good.
    | Posted on 2013-05-21 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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