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    dots Submission Name: Rest Stopdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Sometimes time traveling
    Can lead to mind exhaustion
    Life constantly is unraveling
    Answers and more compelling questions.
    Though the road is already tough
    I can't give in until I had enough
    The path is too steep and rough
    Yet I breathe and exhale in puffs.
    Only to come to an abrupt conclusion
    That life is nothing but a rest stop
    My confusion?
    Is that we get a break, for a minute
    But life waits not.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I read this one twice. The first time I didn't see the rhythm and rhyme of it because the syllables weren't being repeated. I read it outloud and caught the rhyme. Perhaps it would be a good idea to break it up a little bit so add to the rhythm.
    I like the message though- and it reminded me of my own studies. I'm constantly searching til I can't stand it anymore then it's back to the drawing board after a rest. Very good. :)
    | Posted on 2013-05-25 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      That's why we have rest stops. Good.
    | Posted on 2013-05-21 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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