hopeful heart
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hopeful heart
I wish that you could understand, I wish you could walk in my shoes, See through my eyes and FEEL from MY HEART, Through visions vicariously viewed, I wish that I could be like you, Free from the ANGUISH and PAIN, That NEVER ends but builds and ascends, Inside of my heart contained, heartache has tinctured and stained my core, no more do I feel any warmth, I sit alone and watch the sky as the sun sets and slowly transforms, Bursting beauty comes alive and is born, while time somehow stops and stands still, my lungs expand with air as I breathe, while thinking of you IM INSTILLED, inspired and so inexplicably filled with strength and hope for who I am, I wish you could witness this power I feel, I wish somehow that you could understand!! you wont even try yet I can't help but WISH... unable to resist, my foolish hopeful heart |
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| This poem only scores -4 on the Poetry Assessor (http://115.146.95.34/poetry/) and is therefore, unfortunately, in the amateur range. To score higher you need to use fewer affective terms (less emotion) more concrete language, less present tense (with a focus on the past), and fewer "insight" words. Hope this helps. | Posted on 2013-05-25 00:00:00 | by MDalvean | [ Reply to This ] | |
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