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    dots Submission Name: twisted and torndots
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    Author: Midnight_Toker
    Elite Ratio:    0.67 - 13/232/500
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotstwisted and torndots
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    I visualize the world and all of the things
    that make me smile and laugh,
    I don't know what tomorrow will bring
    I can only look at the past,
    it came and went too fast
    then everything faded away,
    left in darkness I glance around
    and the world is bleak and grey,
    an empty shell of yesterday
    thats been left behind to mourn,
    you can pray and wish for what use to exist
    but you'll find yourself twisted and torn,
    your outlook on life will transform
    be reborn with these feelings of contempt,
    for whats meant to be though it seems to me
    that happiness is only moments,
    we love but are forced to lament
    while the future flows rich with sorrow,
    I try to savour the gift of today..
    but its hard when I think of tomorrow.




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      Oh my Lord. I clicked on this poem last month and haven't revisited this site since then. I'm so happy I took a moment to read this bc this is exactly how I have been feeling all day. Going straight to my favorites! Thank you
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    | Posted on 2013-06-13 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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