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    dots Submission Name: cool blue lightdots
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    Author: Midnight_Toker
    Elite Ratio:    0.67 - 13/232/500
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    at night when all the world grows dim
    and stars begin to shine,
    I sit beneath the cool blue light
    and search through out my mind,
    relentlessly reaching, attempting to find,
    cogitations, creations of screaming beautiful silence..
    indisputable artistic science
    defiant of every known law..
    resisting, glistening violence
    consuming my soul with uncontrolled flames of powerfull potent passion!
    now I realize
    as I gently open my eyes,
    that somehow,
    someway..
    ive traveled inside to the very depths of my heart,
    ive entered my center
    Uncovered spiritual paths, that darkness had for so long kept concealed,
    but HERE..
    beneath the cool blue light..
    something profound is revealed,
    my sweet blossoming solace






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      This poem only scores -3.9 on the Poetry Assessor (http://115.146.95.34/poetry/) and is therefore, unfortunately, in the amateur range.

    To score higher you need to use less affective terms (less emotion) more concrete language, less present tense, with a focus on the past, and fewer "insight" words.

    Hope this helps.
    | Posted on 2013-05-25 00:00:00 | by MDalvean | [ Reply to This ]


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