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    dots Submission Name: When Night Fallsdots
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    Author: MmR
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    dotsWhen Night Fallsdots
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    When day's light
    Blinds the Knowing in these eyes
    I whisper enchanted hopefulness
    That you will want me as I want you..

    Yet when night falls
    The tears I was never suppose to cry
    Ripple through every dress-up memory
    That ever made me smile..

    It never even dawned on me
    That letting go was an option
    And now that I see
    It's the only one you ever offered
    I can't decide which hurts more..

    Pretending that you care
    Or knowing you never will.









    Submitted on 2013-05-23 01:49:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It made me feel a little bit hopeless. I've been there before - when they just don't feel the same way, there's not much you can do to change their minds. And moving on hurts. But sometimes the hurt can bring about something beautiful, like this poem. Thank you for sharing!
    | Posted on 2013-05-25 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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