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    dots Submission Name: Last autumndots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    How frequently time flies and how
    All of a sudden in the middle of the autumn
    Leaves and everything behind it
    The chilling flutter of the Hamburg rain,
    And days in twilight rest upon
    Some stoic pillar, intervened, the grape wines -
    So archaic from this bitter earth, I am standing:
    Its tart dry taste upon my aging tongue.
    Those last few memories that shy from me away
    Like rainwater, and all words pale, and there is just
    One last peek into the neverland, there must be
    A reason why each autumn sounds so much
    Like a piano. Some old room, with an old light
    From an even older window, crooked, and easy
    To catch into your hand. The ghost of me is sitting there,
    Waiting, heedless that my book has fallen on the floor,
    Until- the gentle footfall signals your approach,
    I am content
    That once upon a time one Autumn.





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      we all have those memories, good capturing them
    | Posted on 2013-06-01 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]


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