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Last autumn

Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
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Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Last autumn

How frequently time flies and how
All of a sudden in the middle of the autumn
Leaves and everything behind it –
The chilling flutter of the Hamburg rain,
And days in twilight rest upon
Some stoic pillar, intervened, the grape wines -
So archaic from this bitter earth, I am standing:
Its tart dry taste upon my aging tongue.
Those last few memories that shy from me away
Like rainwater, and all words pale, and there is – just
One last peek into the neverland, there must be
A reason why each autumn sounds so much
Like a piano. Some old room, with an old light
From an even older window, crooked, and easy
To catch into your hand. The ghost of me is sitting there,
Waiting, heedless that my book has fallen on the floor,
Until- the gentle footfall signals your approach,
I am content
That once upon a time one Autumn.

Submitted on 2013-05-27 01:27:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  we all have those memories, good capturing them
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