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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 826
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    Bytes: 1330



    Description:
       Describing the yawn and bore of a descending relationship.


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    What's the matter with you lately?
    Help me out; I don't know
    why you're acting so strange.
    What's with this idiotic show?
    Just tell me what's wrong,
    'cause I truly can't tell
    why you'd want to drag me
    through this living hell.
    You've become something now
    that's so hard to recognize.
    Reveal the old you
    before you ensure my demise.
    It's like you're soulless and empty;
    just show me some emotion.
    Get up, do a dance,
    create some commotion.
    You could laugh your ass off
    or cry like a baby.
    Give me SOMETHING to work with.
    You're driving me crazy.
    Be worried or nervous,
    ecstatic or blue.
    Anything but boring;
    hell, demented will do.
    Don't just sit there in silence.
    Come on, I'm begging for attention.
    Why do this to me?
    What are your intentions?
    You've got me confused
    and I can't understand
    why you're being so rude.
    This isn't what I'd planned.
    Go back to normal
    and I'll give this another go.
    Or is this how you'll remain?
    Good God, I'd like to know!




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