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    dots Submission Name: footprintsdots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 829
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    Bytes: 673



    Description:
       this has been a work in progress for many years. i began writing it for a movie project my senior year, but i have hit major writers block. once i get it finished, i will post the rest of the words and maybe even an mp3.


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    dotsfootprintsdots
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    i didn't have anyone to turn to
    when the tough times hit my life, i was alone
    i had to do it on my own, i never thought i'd make it through
    i never had an ounce of hope, then there was you

    chorus;
    i spent the whole of my life just searching
    for the one who'll carry me through good and bad
    then when all seemed lost and i thought i was alone
    i looked down to see the footprints in the sand

    tagline;
    for you'd said you'd never leave me
    even when things turned from fair
    though there's just one set of footprints
    i know who put them there




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      All it all I think it was pretty cool.
    I like the word and what I perceive their meaning
    I think if would look better, on paper if you spaced it differently.

    " I didn't have anyone to turn to
    when the tough times hit, I was alone
    I had to do it on my own"

    I like the chorus it make this beat in my head. I can feel how the music would play. the soft drums a slow guitar and maybe even a fast violin.

    Kudos
    | Posted on 2013-06-12 00:00:00 | by MsUnderstood | [ Reply to This ]


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