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this has been a work in progress for many years. i began writing it for a movie project my senior year, but i have hit major writers block. once i get it finished, i will post the rest of the words and maybe even an mp3.
i didn't have anyone to turn to
when the tough times hit my life, i was alone
i had to do it on my own, i never thought i'd make it through
i never had an ounce of hope, then there was you
i spent the whole of my life just searching
for the one who'll carry me through good and bad
then when all seemed lost and i thought i was alone
i looked down to see the footprints in the sand
for you'd said you'd never leave me
even when things turned from fair
though there's just one set of footprints
i know who put them there
Submitted on 2013-05-30 00:04:05
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All it all I think it was pretty cool.
I like the word and what I perceive their meaning
I think if would look better, on paper if you spaced it differently.
" I didn't have anyone to turn to
when the tough times hit, I was alone
I had to do it on my own"
I like the chorus it make this beat in my head. I can feel how the music would play. the soft drums a slow guitar and maybe even a fast violin.
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