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    dots Submission Name: The difference between Sparrow and Ravendots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe difference between Sparrow and Ravendots
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    Sparrow greets the day so gaily
    with romanticism and invention,
    while Raven sings just the truth;
    she tells all the world about her needs.

    Though, later, taking me aside,
    she confides:
    "Don't think I despise the wind under my wings,
    and the sheer unbridled joy of flight.
    Sparrow tosses aside all care
    to proclaim his rapture of life,
    whereas I prefer to sing these things
    silently in my prayers to God."




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