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    dots Submission Name: Here In This Place dots
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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1063
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    Bytes: 636



    Description:
       Written in 1999


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    Here in my restless wave,
    All in sight ceases to amaze.
    No dreams, no silences, no second goes by without craving...
    Peace, sleep, visions of clouds and sounds of serenity,
    Why can't my eyes see anything of these things ?
    Here in this strange existence,
    Nothing you could say would burn my interest.
    No sin, no corruption, no revelation will stop my persistence,
    For sweet love is my savior,
    Your eyes of relief with lips of absolution.
    Yes, your soul is my bliss.
    Here in this perfect garden,
    Something moved inside my heart.




    Submitted on 2013-06-06 19:55:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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